A poem written by me! Please read!?

I liked many parts in this poem, including the message you're sending. However, I think that even though you do make most (i mean 90%) of your poem have smart rhymes, in some stanzas it seems that having to make it rhyme inhibits the poem. I think you should fix the forced rhymes (especially the last sentence) or change the poem in the sense that it no longer is a rhyming poem. It actually is an awesome poem! :D:D:D: